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Main problem: You cannot string a bunch of loosely connected, weak phrases together and expect it to sound coherent. I think this is a problem lots of beginning poets make. ...

The first thing I'd like to see you do with this poem is to add some capital letters. I think a poem looks much more professional and much neater if ...

Thanks, guys. I attempted a sonnet because I'm terrible at rhythm and structured poetry and all that. I realize that the rhythm in this poem is just a weensy tiny ...

On the statement of this poem: I recongize the humanity in the bible, and my lean was more so not to her story, but his. I wanted to focus in ...

*blushes* Thanks for the crits, guys. I have, actually, been working on this poem since late February, and it's still driving me crazy. Maybe I'll write a sequel about the ...

mainly the problem I see with rhetorical questions is that a lot of beginning writers use too many of them, thinking it's really deep to ask "what is life?" "why ...

I don't care as much how I got here...I care that I am here. I just want to make the most out of my life. What matters is that I ...

Yeah, I think it's wrong to convert people, but I can sort of see where they're coming from. I mean, if you're very involved in your religion and believe in ...

So, if some higher power created me, he/she/it/they would be justified in being nasty about me not believing in him/her/it/them? As an atheist, of course, that is the least of ...

My favorite incidence involving my atheist beliefs happened more than a year ago. It was "Frosh Night" - the time when freshmen can come and look at clubs, represented by ...

Late February, and the ground was still frozen. A few warm days flickered by, days we thought we could keep by breathing deeply outside. No effort could have stopped the ...

I agree with Clau and something euclidean here. The "message" here was awfully cliche. Remember, if you want to convey a message through your work, the worst thing you can ...

Clau-- I don't think "emo" is a valid class of poetry. Best, Brad Oh, of course emo poetry is a class of poetry, sort of in the way that the ...

The best google one was...OH, what was it?! You typed in something along the lines of "failure" and hit "I'm Feeling Lucky" and ended up at the White House homepage.

Gosh, I hate my parents reading my stuff. My mom's a writer...she's never offered to help out or anything. We don't really talk about that stuff. Unfortunately, if I win ...