CSheperd

Pretty good, pretty pretty good. It just needs some polishing and thats it. I won't talk about grammar, only chodes really get on what spell check can solve. Unlike most ...

I couldn't really finish it, with that said i can't really give good criticism on the story. The whole thing all and all is a little bit flat. It didn't ...

someone spiked me with pcp a few nights ago, and this is the polished version of what i wrote that night I knew I was fucked, laying there, staring at ...

It was pretty good. You pointed out your own vocabulary so the only thing i will say on that is it just doesn't mesh with your style of writing very ...

Your poem had a very rythmic flow to it, it was very personal and expressed t's meanings very well.

It was good, you twist ended a poem good. It could flow a little better

The only problem I had with your story is I'd actually like to read more. I think it's pretty unique simply for the fact i can't say I've read anything ...

I have to say I had a hard time finishing the story, it needs quite a few quotations and you should probably think about breaking dialogue off from the paragraphs. ...

I liked how the story took place with in the whole span of a T-10 countdown and the descriptiveness and imagery was very good. As for the plot, it was ...

I thought it was pretty good. It flowed pretty smoothly and had great rythm. I didn't really catch the theme though, but that just gives people something to think on. ...

I thought it was a pretty good poem, the imagery was subtle but the emotion was definitely tangible.

I thought it was pretty good, it offered a very amusing perspective to the shadier aspects of crime. Mark Twain meets the Good Fellas.

Don't try to solve the mystery, just enjoy it. Three days had passed, slowly, but they had passed. Exhaustion had begun to set in, worming it's way under my skin. ...

It was a very vague story and included details that fit pretty awkward in the rythm of the story. The plot could use some sharpening too.