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Re: Of Buses and Fridges
Wow...this one was great hahaha Loved the punchline.
Jan 17, 2012 -
Re: What life has to offer
That's pretty good. I liked how it was a flashback. It makes me think about going back to school and daydream of my own summer mischievities. Maybe for the thing ...
Jan 17, 2012 -
Re: Seven Minutes to Regret
Eh it was alright, kind of just waided through it. Felt borderline too descriptive.
Jan 17, 2012 -
Re: Please, stop.
This is a series of entries from a journal I found in an abandoned house. The property it is on has long since become an illegal dumping site. Here are ...
Jan 16, 2012 -
Re: Connections
My honest opinion of your story was that it was well written ad the descriptions were pretty vivid. You truly painted it out for anyone who reads it. On the ...
Jan 2, 2012 -
Re: the idea of dystopian woe and doom
I've been trying my hand at dystopic writing for the last couple of months(Ever since watching Metropolis). I've been rolling with the question of what would happen if the general ...
Jan 2, 2012 -
Re: Torture- Excerpt from my Novel.
Gotta say, I really liked it. The characters were well formulated. Your descriptions were next to immaculate. It reminded me alot of the torture scene in Reservoir Dogs but only ...
Jan 4, 2011 -
Re: Im Going To Hell
This story, I have to say, was a pretty difficult read. You seemed to jump perspective quite a bit from third to first, especially when you were trying to show ...
Jan 4, 2011 -
Re: Fire
I thought the overall description and personifacation in the story was what stood out most about it. It was very vibrant look into something as simple as a house fire. ...
Oct 17, 2010 -
Re: Street Walker
A lonely procession of foot steps echoed down the street. The night had calmed down to nothing more than empty streets and somber shadows. A man staggered silently with a ...
Sep 2, 2010 -
Re: Clouds
For being so short that really captivated me. It was pretty descriptive and i really could get a feel for the main character. I hope there is more that follows.
Aug 20, 2010 -
Re: wrong choices
it was pretty good, but there wasn't much emotion to it, not trying to sound like a broken record. The plot was pretty stiff with little detail on it.
Aug 20, 2010 -
Re: Brothers-in-Arms
I thought it was pretty good. The description was pretty vivid as was the character detail.The character interraction was great too. The plot didn't really draw me in too much, ...
Aug 20, 2010 -
Re: Erm, well it doesn't have a title yet
i thought that was very good. It had such nice description to itand i got the arizona trailer park in the summer kind of feeling from it. I was hooked ...
Aug 19, 2010 -
Re: By the pool
I tend to disdain romantic stories but i thought this was pretty good. The character connections were pretty great as was the setting for the story. It gave me a ...
Aug 19, 2010
