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Thanks guys, I really appreciate the reviews. And as for the grammar... I'm working on it :wink:

Thanks for the feedback; I'll definitely consider everything you said while I'm writing the rest, though I'd like to leave this chapter the way it is at least for now. ...

Thanks for the review(s), and I will definitely fix up some of the things you pointed out. And like you said with the paragraph spacing, the thoughts were italicized but ...

Really, really nice poem. Even in something this short you managed to convey so much emotion that it gave an instant connection. Great job!

Thanks to both of you. VAF3, I owe you a special thanks because your poem probably inspired some of the storyline here, and I'm glad you liked it! Also, AuthorLeesa, ...

That's a good idea, and it probably would improve your point of view (I was going to mention that in my first review but I guess I forgot). I've actually ...

Wow thanks. I've been trying to write a novel for a while and I thought this was probably my best yet. Nice to know someone else liked it too! And ...

I feel like I'm intruding a little by reviewing just because your poem was so heartfelt and solemn. All I can say is that that was really, really deep and ...

I like it. It's short, sweet, and fun to read. The rhythm and rhyme give it a special beat that makes it enjoyable as well. Nice job.

Wow. I had to write one of these for a contest once and all of yours just blew it away... each and every one of these are amazing!