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First and foremost, good job with the story. I liked it quite a lot, and the beginning even had a slight air of suspense before you could figure out that ...

It's still pretty good, but I'm noticing the flow breaking up a little bit here and there. Nothing to really worry about, but just be aware of it. Also I ...

Nice job with the story, and Justtrying already pointed out the grammatical errors. I definitely like how you infused some originality into a premise that always seems tired when I ...

Nice job... with everything. The story itself was excellent, really engaging with a great premise. Your characters are very good as well; through five chapters they develop almost constantly. (I ...

Whoa... First, I must say, that was excellent. The most important part, the story, had an interesting premise and the character of Renee was remarkably good for a short story. ...

I found it interesting, especially since when one sees aliens in a story they always seem to be destroying something. It's an interesting new perspective that humans are really the ...

I'm not a normally a fan of poetry but this was excellent. You really painted a picture, and I especially loved the verse: Perhaps the highway is scared of night- ...

It's definitely worth pursuing, as the idea behind the story seems pretty good. However you do need a lot of practice with the grammar itself, and I found it a ...