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Re: Samara’s story-Ghost house
This is a very saddening story. One thing I would say is that you're using commas in a bunch of places where they shouldn't be. This isn't that big of ...
Dec 3, 2022 -
Re: understanding from a sufferer. worry from a friend.
I enjoyed this one, I could just see the images playing in my head. One thing I would say that would make this story more... character? I'm not sure of ...
Dec 3, 2022 -
Re: Thoughts That Ease My Mind
This is really good! I love the dramatics! I would suggest not using the same word so close together in the same sentence? I propose using the word 'slumber', or ...
Dec 3, 2022 -
Re: maybe i won't hide forever
I love the C. S. Lewis vibes. One thing I would say is that for all the &s, maybe actually put and? It'd make a bit more sense. You also ...
Dec 2, 2022 -
Re: Dark stories to read whenever and wherever
This is a cool story! I love all the vampires. Personally, I like the first one the best, especially the last paragraph where you described it as a broken music ...
Dec 2, 2022 -
Re: Celestria’s story
I love your writing style. It's so pretty and it seems olden. One thing I would say is in the third to last paragraph the only thing you need to ...
Dec 2, 2022