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Tanka.. :) 5-7-5-7-7 Beat, very addictive form of poetry. I strongly recommend trying it. It's quite challenging, but fun. :) Drug induced lying And falsified promises From the day before, ...

I'm doing some experiments with a form of poetry called "tanka". It has a syllable count of 5-7-5-7-7. It's quite addictive. This was my first attempt. Heart shaped river rocks ...

Three different pieces about color, in some way. c: A ribbon of color Seemed to course through my body Extending from my heart Through every vein Every artery Every little ...

Screaming mimes Quiet erupting into awful fury Sound barriers broken By the swift screaming pulse Pain, purification, only partway there Sensations gone Only stinging bees and numbing angels Bottled,

Was doing a couple of poems centered around breathing, just to see how many I could come up with. This was one of them. I'm not totally sure about it, ...

Crazy and absolutely wonderful. This was silly, and while it could use some work in technicalities, brilliant. Great job. c:

I was actually about to point out what the comment before me did. Also, I have to say, the lack of articles did bother me.. it was just awkward reading ...

Interesting topic and perspective... I like it. c: The rhyme scheme was tight and concise, and created a great flow for your piece. There was little emotion in this piece, ...

I kept on expecting her to be freed.. haha. Incredible imagery, well told story, and rhythm like a healthy heartbeat. Slow and steady, powerful and concise. Great job. c: Coral

I don't think that you need to lengthen this at all, simply rearrange it into smaller lines. The way that you have it now doesn't really create a flow. I ...

The first couple of lines, while sounding cool, don't really make sense. You said "our" at the end of the first line, but "our" what? Did you mean us? That ...

I would shade in this a bit darker, but leave the heart as the darkest part of the picture. I would also sharpen the heart a bit more, and angle ...

Redemption Is in a smile In a hopeless love The way that eyes light up And a laugh escapes behind struggling lips A hand holding another A hug between two ...

Sorry :/

This is absolutely adorable. I loved this piece- it was sweet, concise, tightly woven, and just overall so well written. Great emotions, imagery, and flow... great job. :)