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Flashing mirrors Sewn so carefully into the shifting fabric (of time) Reflected an unearthly world Of dancing women With beautiful ebony and ivory skin Swaying to songs of another thought ...

I really liked this piece.. I'm not sure if I fully grasped everything in it (all that you would, as the writer), but all that I did catch took my ...

I think that perhaps you could work on the flow in the last stanza.. it threw me off, as it was a bit disrupted by too many syllables. Overall, this ...

I really enjoyed this story... at first I was a bit skeptical, but the characters were very well developed, the dialog believable, and I thought the amount of description was ...

Don't know where this came from. I usually don't. I guess it's supposed to be expected now. Lithe movements Only the beginning of a song A dance of savage creatures ...

Nice piece.. especially if you don't do much poetry. I would recommend adding some more punctuation in the lines themselves (not at the ends of them), and maybe reducing some ...

I really enjoyed this piece, but there were some things that kind of irked me. First of all, the opening. It's been mentioned in previous reviews, but I just want ...

This was a nice piece, but I think it could be improved in several ways: the rhythm was a bit off in the first half of the piece, as the ...

I really enjoyed this... it's really interesting that you did both sides of that situation.. it's said that you can't fully interpret or understand the actions of another until you ...

There was a light When I looked up, To the sky from the ocean, But as I sank further, hand outstretched, A claw of hope closed as the light died ...

I swear, even I don't know what this is. Really odd. Dop. The ink dripped Again and again Such monotonous tones In brutal destruction of An otherwise pristine white carpet. ...

These were beautiful pieces... I don't know exactly what to say or how to critique them, as of now I'm swept away by your beautiful words, gorgeous imagery, and vivid ...

This was EXCELLENT. And that is not something I say often. The trains of thought were so realistic, so well expressed, so concise and THOUGHT like... streams of feeling and ...

Powerfully written.. altogether an interesting piece, especially towards the beginning. Nice write.

Interesting piece... the imagery was beautiful. I would consider giving some change in the structure of your phrasing to give more of a conclusion, but otherwise, I don't have much ...