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This was a nice piece.. the rhyme scheme was pleasantly consistent, the tone was subtle and sweet.. overall, a nice gentle piece. However, I would consider evening out the rhythm ...

This is really well done... I would consider curving the neck to make it seem more of a natural position, as well as add in some shading to give it ...

Okay, so now I know FOR SURE that this will show. Got the right link. ^_^ Criticisms, comments, opinions, thoughts? Thanks!! :) "X Marks the Spot" "Ocean Crow" "The Rare ...

Okay.. so I've never posted any photography.. like.. anywhere. I dunno what you guys will think of it. In fact, I'm not even sure that it will show up, haha. ...

I have to agree with Anger.. this seemed more a rant. I would look over his suggestions.. I'm not that detailed, haha, but I agree with what he said. I ...

Hi- I'm Coral. Welcome to YWS. :) I too am a 17 year old Senior (youngest in my class D:), who has a rather soul-consuming addiction to fantasy books. I ...

Welcome to YWS. :) If you have any specific questions or anything, feel free to send me a Private Message (PM). I don't really know what advice to give you.. ...

Okay, first of all... for a second attempt at poetry, this kinda blew me away. Excellent write.. gorgeous use of imagery, nice cadence, there was a great little rhyming scheme ...

This is excellent.. the quality of the detail and shading blow me away.. the only thing I would say in even remote "criticism" is perhaps add more depth... as in, ...

For some reason, this failed to invoke the emotions that it seemed you were trying to invoke. I couldn't really relate to the piece.. not because of a lack of ...

I read the description and inwardly groaned. But this was excellent. The imagery you created with simple phrases was very well done.. beautiful wording, nice descriptions. The ending was great. ...

Welcome to the site! YWS is really helpful in a lot of ways.. it can dramatically help with my writing. I know mine has improved by tons. If you want ...

That was ridiculously, mindblowingly, "I wish I could write even close to that well" good. Incredible images, beautiful thoughts, a stream of consciousness that led me on a journey where ...

Beautiful imagery and a very sweet piece altogether.. I love the emotion in this.. I always love sweet poems like that addressed to people. Excellent piece. c: Coral

Nice piece.. it was a bit simplistic for me, but that's not always a bad thing. The emotions were very real, and I'm sure it would sound great set to ...