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Hello again- Really nice pieces again.. love the detail. I would consider playing with the exposition/contrast a bit. It's a bit too soft as is, and I think with some ...

Hi there- I'm not SUPER crazy about the top and bottom photos.. I like them, but they weren't excellent. However, I DO love the middle three.. you have an excellent ...

Hi there :) The smiley faces were a bit distracting, but.. fine. :) I too have had a concussion, a MAJOR one. But I didn't have any of umm.. that. ...

Great pics.. as for attachments.. I use photobucket, even though it's kind of a pain. But it works. Anywho.. really nice pics. I loved the first and last ones.. it ...

Hi- okay. So I'm going to start by saying, I'm not a huge advocate of punctuation. However.. in this piece.. you need it. Don't ask me why. But when I ...

I really liked the concept of this.. I've recently read quite a few poems that are about anxiety, and this seemed to be similar, but a bit different. However, I ...

This is called a "Senyru", a Haiku that isn't about nature. It is the same type of poem in all categories excepting that. I do like this one.. very simple, ...

Nice piece.. I would try broadening your word choice or making the phrasing more interesting in some way. I would also suggest that you throw in some metaphors or similes.. ...

Nice piece.. a few things.. First of all... My GOSH that was tiny. Fortunately, with my awesome eyesight (maybe a little bit aided by my equally awesome glasses) I was ...

Hi, and welcome to YWS! :) If you have any questions about anything at all, just send me a private message (PM) and I'll try to help out as much ...

The alleyway spoke of trouble. Thrashed advertisements and posters peeled away from the walls in an attempt to warn me off, to bar my way in feeble protection. I inwardly ...

I’m shooting heroin up to the stars and my pockets all full of bottlerockets and rainbows ready to light the sky up with my dynamite stick vengeances. Yes I’m ready ...

Personally, I disagree with the last reviewer.. a lot of excellent stories are actually quite simple.. a day in the life of someone else is almost always interesting to an ...

This was beautifully written. It was a pleasure to read. However, it was difficult to read. I would suggest breaking this up into different paragraphs to make it easier on ...

Love this.. you have a great rhyme scheme, and while not entirely subtle, it doesn't need to be. Some poems just need that sort of thing to really work. The ...