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Re: Attempts at Drawing:
So, I didn't draw at all during the summer. And before that, it was mostly just in school books alongside my notes- before that, I used to draw all the ...
Sep 15, 2010 -
Re: Hi and hello to you all!
Hi Max :) I'm Coral. So you live in Sweden? I have a lot of friends from there- I live in Prague, and am with the whole international community thingy, ...
Sep 15, 2010 -
Re: We Used To Be Friends
This is a nice piece- the title and first two lines REALLY remind me of the Dandy Warhols song, but the rest is different. I think that this could definitely ...
Sep 14, 2010 -
Re: Envied Childhoods
One minute write. Darker than usual. Thanks for reading. I envy the people who look back on their lives and wish that they lived in the past that they could ...
Sep 14, 2010 -
Re: [September Contest] Coconuts
I loved the concept behind this- the generator can be pretty difficult to use, as the prompts can be quite outlandish, but you definitely made this work. I love the ...
Sep 13, 2010 -
Re: One Hundred Nights of Thunder
Thanks for reading! :) There’s been one hundred nights of thunder A tenfold more of rain My eyes are tired of lightning And are riddled through with pain. The booming ...
Sep 12, 2010 -
Re: Smile
I have to agree with the other review- try incorporating some genuine love, some imagery, some emotion of another type. There's a lot of repetition in this, and a lot ...
Sep 12, 2010 -
Re: Mother
I really liked this piece- it's really simple, but you definitely had a unique way of handling your poem. Personally, I really liked the italics, use of repetition, and the ...
Sep 10, 2010 -
Re: Divine Chaos
I actually loved this piece- except for the last line. It made all the rest seem ingenuine. It destroyed the gorgeous imagery and fantastical pictures. I would omit it entirely. ...
Sep 10, 2010 -
Re: It's the Way...
Minute long write. Thanks for feedback. :D It’s the inaudible, the way you smile and laugh inside closed lips- it’s the way your eyes crease and fold, finding their homes ...
Sep 10, 2010 -
Re: Harry Potter Rapping Battle
This. Was. Amazing. I think that's all that needs to be said. :) -Coral-
Sep 10, 2010 -
Re: Young Philosophy
This is so short and simple, and absolutely wonderful. I love the repetition in the word choice, the (kind of) play on words, and the little words of wisdom. Concise, ...
Sep 10, 2010 -
Re: Jared Leto Sketch
So, I think that this is a good sketch (and a good subject c: ), but I can see what you mean. I would think about making more of a ...
Sep 9, 2010 -
Re: All's Fair in Family and Photography
I hope you don't mind, but instead of going picture by picture, I'm just going to critique similarities and style things. :) First of all- I think that these were ...
Sep 9, 2010 -
Re: Hi there!
Thanks :D Well, I usually play anything really- anything I can get my hands on. I grew up on PCs, because my dad is a computer technician, so... Dawn of ...
Sep 9, 2010
