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This was another good chapter. I would recommend bringing anger into the equation from Liliah herself- I have a friend who was raped, and she was pissed off. REALLY pissed ...

Well, I'll second Dune and Kafka on the Shore. Also, all time favorite, The Name of the Wind by Patrick Rothfuss. Read it. It will change the way you write ...

This was another wonderfully written piece, as usual. Though I think Luke could have kicked Hunter a couple of times. Or at least hit him a bit more. No CC ...

Nice chapter, again. The bit with Hunter seemed kind of out of place to me though- it seemed completely out of character for him. They've been friends a lot time, ...

Loved the development in this one... it's gradual and realistic. I don't like Hunter anymore though. :c Anywho- another great chapter- I have nothing to complain about in this one. ...

Hi there. :) So, I thought this was another good chapter- but the argument towards the end bothered me. I was kind of inwardly giggling about him eating ice cream ...

I thought this was another pretty great chapter. The chasing scene seemed a bit unrealistic to me- brilliant and fun, but not quite fitting for Luke's character. Again, the description ...

This was another great piece- there were some parts that seemed a bit awkwardly worded to me, but I'm sure if you ran through it again, and perhaps read it ...

This was another great installment- really enjoying this book. :) I would recommend making Luke more reluctant about joining the family. If he is so resistant, than he wouldn't feel ...

First of all- I just noticed that this was posted on my birthday. Kudos for picking an awesome day to post it. :P Okay- now- I thought this was really ...

I thought this was nice- it was an interesting approach to the topic you were given- one I wouldn't have thought of. Nicely done for that. :) I think that ...

I thought this was a great piece- it was very simple, but flowed nicely, and started and stopped at good points. A couple things- I would recommend not starting so ...

Best. Limerick. Ever. No joke. I loved this. Yay! :D

I really like the concept of this one- nicely done. I would think about perhaps expanding the piece. As it is, it's quite repetitive, and really doesn't have much too ...

This was fantastic- the characters, the situation... everything was so original and fun. Loved the speeches, and especially the end. I don't really have anything to critique about this... it ...