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First of all, I would suggest splitting these up into smaller chapters, just for reviewing-it makes it easier, and the less daunting it looks, the more review you'll get. Second ...

Hands These are my hands. I lay them open before you, vulnerable, honest; because you need to see them. I think that you could omit "because" and maybe say "I ...

You're one of my new favorites, and you should change nothing. 'Nuff said.

Megan- instead of posting the link from flickr, try going to "Share this", get the BBCode and just grab the text from [img]to[/img]. Don't forget to get those little parts ...

This is freakin' amazing. "She tasted like cat. It was glorious." You are a god.

Hi there :) 1. So, it looks like you used flash on this one- there's a glare on the batteries on the front, which is pretty distracting. Personally, I generally ...

If you have some time, could you please take a glance at this? Thanks so much! :) -Coral-

Your avvie kind of scares me. It's pretty fierce. And awesome. ANYWAYS- if you have some time, could you please take a look at this? Thanks :D -Coral-

If you have the time, could you please take a look at this? Thanks- really appreciate it. :) -Coral-

Hi there :) So... Honestly, I have absolutely nothing constructive to say about these, because I know zilch about origami. HOWEVER- I DO want to say that I completely, utterly, ...

rattles reverberated from her almost closed mouth, as she exhaled once again, such an occupation in her broken body’s state- it truly was a rattle, because her body was a ...

Interesting piece, but the words themselves are a little too simplistic for me- I would suggest broadening the vocabulary a bit to make it really interesting, and maybe include some ...

Definitely emotional, I'll give you that: but, you needed to do more showing than telling, especially towards the beginning. Maybe leave the face that they committed suicide until the end ...

First time writing poetry. Maybe a colon instead of a period, just to make the flow better, except of course if you want that to go along with the next ...

I really don't know how I feel about this- I feel like the concept is interesting, but feels too forced because it's so concentrated in such a short piece. This ...