Butterfinger

Hi-ya! I'll make this short and sweet! Love love love it! My favorite line: " I never knew hate had a body" Brilliant work!!!!

Hi-ya!!!! Love this poem!! Especially the last part " I've been there " Kind of eerie!

Hi-ya!!! It's so short and simple, that my mind over thinks it.....Not sure where it's going, but Brilliant!!!!

Hi-ya!!!!! I love this poem! Very fun to read! It makes my thinker think!!! You have a way with words that no matter which direction you take it, it's Brilliant! ...

Hi-ya!!!! I love a poem that paints a picture that's worth so much more. My favorite stanza: The engine splutters a dark deathly slime Great Imagery!! Poison running though the ...

Hi-ya!!!! First, Your title is very interesting. It should be 'Breathe'. It makes my thinker think! This stanza is like your willing the rain to take you, and essentially kill ...

Hi-ya!!! Your piece has a wonder flow to it! It never seemed like you were forcing any words to fit your scheme. The simplicity of it makes it a wonderful ...

I'm not the best for a review on this piece, but the way you have with words is Brilliant! You can paint a picture that might not make much sense ...

This poem has a lot of history behind it. I appreciate any and all critique you have to offer! Where you've walked, I've crawled Where you've stood, I've stooped Where ...

BAHAHAHA! I love this! It's fun to read it as fast as you can! Brilliant work!

Hi-ya!! I think you have a Brilliant poem here! Here's my comments and suggestions! Do with them what you will! They are just that, suggestions, but you are the author, ...

I can really feel the emotion in this piece because this is what I'm going through right now with my sister. Brilliant writing! Something that bugs me: I will be ...

I truly believe this is a Brilliant piece of poetry! Your word choice didn't feel forced at all even with the rhyme scheme. It read very smoothly and was very ...

Thank you for your comments! I'm horrible with punctuation for poetry! Thanks for the help!

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