Butterfinger

Hey there! I love to see different types of pieces that come from interesting prompts, and this one is great! I really think you have some great lines that work ...

I know your mom will love it! Do we get to hear it?

Hi-ya!! Hmmm.....I feel like this is a great start to something more. It's building up to something then it cuts off! I'd love to read more, but this could be ...

Dear Period, You unpredictable, natures' pet. What did I ever do to deserve this treatment? My pants won't fit, I'm bloating fast My body aches, I need a cast. The ...

You ought to think or you'd cease to be. Did you write this part or quote it?

Wow. One simple word that could swing drastically both ways. Wow in the sense that this was-no joke or offense intended- a huge run on, winded rant about drips. Wow ...

Wow, this poem really hit home. It reads like prose with the dead in rhyming and set up of the whole piece. I seriously don't have any critique nit picks ...

Hi-ya!!! Here's my comments!! Do you see a smile behind those blue eyes? I love how you bring the reader straight into the setting, and give us something to grab ...

Hi-ya! Here's my comments! My fingers twist the page, Love this line! It really takes the reader to the physical setting of this poem! A never ending cycle. Kind of ...

Hi-ya!!! First off- I'm a huge phantom of the opera fan!! Absolutely love it! Anyway! You've has got amazing writing talent! I would definitely enter it in the fair! Truly ...

Hi-ya!!! First off- I'm a huge phantom of the opera fan!! Absolutely love it! Anyway! Your sister has got amazing writing talent! I would definitely enter it in the fair! ...

I've been contemplating going into counseling, and I imagine it would be just as you've described. Except more crying, tissues, and a big fluffy pillow. As I float above heartaches ...

Hi-ya! I'm usually a fan of rhyming as long as it reads smoothly and the flow is consistent. This piece however I regret to say, felt terribly forced. My favorite ...

Hi-ya!! I'm a huge fan of poets that I haven't yet read any of their work. Your title drew me in and I love your piece! Here's my comments: Breathing ...

Hi-ya! First off- you write beautifully!! This is so your style! It is easy to follow and flows nicely because of the rhyming. This is one of a few poems ...