Burma86

Okay, so this definitely is a powerful story. You are able to illustrate pain her pain and her desire to fight back against all odds. However, your story resembles a ...

Well, you certainly were right about this being a very gruesome and bloody story. But I also found it to be a very enjoyable and interesting read. Admittedly, the vampire ...

What a beautiful story. It was truly haunting, and most importantly, it was poignant. The manner in which your main character reacts to the woman is perfect. This idea of ...

I agree with wickedwonder here. You really worked hard on this and it paid off. You have successfully created an intense and chilling story that will keep your readers on ...

What a fantastic story. You definitely have the apathetic attitude of a teen down without making your story unnecessarily angsty. These encounters are original and relatable and most importantly, they

I really love the way this piece was organized. You created a story with lots of action, balanced by an insight into the characters. I found myself caring a great ...

This is part of a larger work, so some explanations are necessary. Helena has recently gained the ability to manipulate fire. Three other kids she has yet to meet can ...

This was very well-written and compelling. Right off the bat, I could tell from your language that this was from the perspective of a child. Writing from a child's perspective ...

This is a truly haunting story. The imagery creates an almost ethereal aspect to the story, which I'm sure you had hoped for. So kudos for pulling it off! There ...

This was an excellent read. Your sentences flowed well and didn't run on. You did a very good job of keeping the reader's attention throughout the story and even creating ...

Hey! Cool story. Fun to read. I really liked your creepy description of the disguised monster Stan. You did a very good job of creating a villain there. However, I ...

To explain, this was taken from a story of mine that is ongoing. There are elements to the whole Creature aspect that aren't explained here. This is the only part ...

Trisael crouched atop a tall building in the business district. Her long black hair was done in a ponytail. She was tall and thin, with long skinny limbs. Her expression ...

This was a fantastic piece. The innocence of the child during the panic and chaos of the bomb raids made the end of the story both haunting and beautiful. Thanks ...

This story blew me away. It was superb in so many ways. In particular, I smiled and chuckled to myself whenever Violet let out one of her perfectly-timed, biting comments. ...