BugBoyAndy

What I liked most about this poem, was that it's long. I don't like long poems, but I have a problem with making mine long. *chuckles* Make changes as you ...

I'm not sure, but want to point this out anyway, but I believe you forgot a question mark at the end of this sentence: “Fine. But be back before twelve, ...

In this part, you can understand she's angry, but you might want to say more on what she's thinking. It's not the best example, but you get the idea, right? ...

I am a published author. I own my own publishing house for kids and unpublished writers. I love to write for the young people out there, it makes me so ...

You know, before I go on this kinda reminded of Matilda. Not that I'm saying it's anything like it, it's just that previous reviewers are saying that the mother is ...

Nicely done, I like it. It sort of reminds me of those wonderful adventure books, like Alice in Wonderland and the Wizard of Oz. It captures that feeling from me. ...

I liked it, but I think that the mother is a bit extreme. Let her show her hatred in more discreet ways, like I don't know, selling her belongings on ...

If you are going to continue to develop the mother's character and her relationship with the child in your storyline I suggest at least giving the reader a clue of ...

Sakura, Thank you so much for reading, and for the suggestions and critique. I am very open for comments, especially, most importantly, young readers. You spotted a typo, this is ...

It was some time after five o’ clock on a Monday morning, and I must have been in a deep sleep, because my alarm clock didn’t wake me. It was ...