Buddy.

I agree with the previous two, it's really flowy and it doens't take long to read. I have to say i like that ta the beggining we feel as though ...

“Buddy… I’ve played….more games of…. black jack…. than you can ever… hope to.” Gladys slowly answered. You don't need to put commas after the ellipses'. And i also don't think ...

I tend to agree with those above me, i mean, some of the ideas are actually pretty good, but the overall idea of the story is vague and confusing. Plus, ...

I';ll try and work systematically: I would try and rephrase the word 'deader' in the first paragraph. Try tan-coloured sedan instead of tan sedan. Ok, i couldn't pick too many ...

This is actually a really strange story and i attribute part of that to both the ending and to the writing style. I think you should probably add quotation marks ...

Hey, this is my first 'critique' so bear with me as i try to not be a complete waste of space. To be honest i think you should remove the ...