-
Re: Not yet titled
Prologue The infant wailed as Jayston Hart set her down on the metal operating table. Shakily grasping a nearby needle, he injected his small child, watching as her eyelids slowly ...
Oct 18, 2011 -
Re: Mankinds Farewell
This is a well written poem. I liked the description the line "Just remember if all the Worlds seas were ink" because I think it is fairly easily imagined. In ...
Oct 18, 2011 -
Re: The Martyr
This is a really well written poem. It is interesting and I like the description in it. My favorite lines are "in the golden autumn morning. Breathe in the fumes ...
Oct 18, 2011 -
Re: Pie Rats
I really liked this poem. I enjoyed the way it was written and the humour of it. It was amazing and I can find no problems in it. Overall, I ...
Oct 18, 2011 -
Re: Do You See What You've Done?
I enjoyed this poem. I found it quite well written. The poem doesn't have much flow to it because of the punctuation, but it still sounds pretty good. My favorite ...
Oct 18, 2011 -
Re: Not yet titled
Prologue The newborn squealed as her mother swaddled her in a blanket, tightly woven by hand from the finest grasses of the land. Gently lifting the infant, she cradled it ...
Oct 11, 2011 -
Re: Like Chocolate for a Broken Heart
I really enjoyed this poem. I especially like the way it flows and the way you described everything in the first part of the poem. My favorite lines in the ...
Oct 11, 2011 -
Re: Freedom
That was a wonderfully written poem. I like the description and the way you finished off the poem. My favorite lines are "the branded D on his cheek, burning with ...
Oct 11, 2011 -
Re: Daydream
I close my eyes, and to my great astonishment, Gracefully feathered wings lift me. I will myself to soar, High above the flowering plants and towering trees. The water daringly ...
Aug 25, 2011 -
Re: Suffocating
I think this poem is amazing. The punctuation really gave a great effect to the overall poem and made it much more dramatic. It was a great poem and I ...
Aug 2, 2011 -
Re: I'm sure
I found this poem excellent. It flows quite nicely and is well written. I can't find anything in this poem that could be improved. You did a wonderful job.
Jun 3, 2011 -
Re: with out you
Wow. That is very beautifully written. The wording is amazing and it flows very well. I found it wonderful and can't find anything about it that needs to be improved. ...
Jun 3, 2011 -
Re: A loss so great, it makes thunder cry out
This is a wonderful poem. I found the first few lines amazingly written. I like the way you repeated the first few lines at the end and the effect it ...
Jun 3, 2011 -
Re: echoes
I thought that this poem was amazing. It took me a few times of reading it to understand but it seemed to get better every time that I read it ...
May 31, 2011 -
Re: Hunted 2 *Not accepting*
This is Isha on her cousin's account! Just so you all know... >.> TARRION I wrapped an arm around Domi's shoulders and stared at the new-comers. Glad to hear that ...
Jul 13, 2010
