Bronco

are we supposed to guess what book it comes from, or something? ???

quite interesting, and I like the way you've typified 21st century 'technology'. However what is a Cresco? Only other thing, the whole poem is written as if "I" am saying ...

6/10 interesting, but could use some colour :wink:

quite funny :D The second stanza especially flows well, and the 'bee in the bonnet' bit fits the author quite well :lol:

very nice poem, and I'm proud to have voted the second option! One comment, the 'something clicked' seems slightly out of place...

oh, it's not really...

nah, it's not bad but really it needs to be longer imo...

yeah that is the case, I'll have to use breaks next time! :D

wow that certainly is random. sounds like something I'd write about, if I felt random enough to put my thoughts down on LCD screen. Forget the pad...

now that is a poem after mine own heart :D Great rhyme, good rhythm, and a nice sentimental subject. A+. Only comment is that I think it finishes a bit ...

[pre]Hi all, this poem is not anything in the ordinary, in fact it's quite unusual. It would take me a year to explain the subject matter to you, so I ...

I know this is old, but I just thought I'd throw in my two cents worth. Looks like everyone has done a pretty thorough critique, but there's a few points ...

well first let me commend you on an interesting little piece! It would be well worth continuing it. In particular, I like the phrase "snowy embrace of home". Very poetical! ...

have yet to write some romantic poem about a cowboy and cowgirl riding off into the sunset you scared me with that.. but another recuit! hehe, Boni's doing good work, ...

somehow I don't think that I'll bother competing, that poem is kinda too good to compare with :wink: