Bromthebard

This is really good. I love the ending, it's strange and unexpected. I did see some places where he was talking and there were no quotation marks, I may have ...

Wow, I usually hate poetry, but this is really good. The style is really good, the story it's telling is amazing. I wish all poetry was this good. I don't ...

Very nice story. I am a very visual thinker, and you put so many images into my head. Your details were great. Though, I must say, the story is kind ...

Oh, man, I've said these same things my entire life. I've developed a theory, God has created other intelligent life somewhere, just nothing that looks like humans, this is because ...

Yeah the education system is messed up, but I will have to say that technology in school is a very good thing, but we can't let it get the better ...

I agree with the above comment, at first I was thinking you were needing some guidance, then you just evolved into guiding yourself, you seem to me like a good ...

This story is very graphic, but for some reason, I love it. I noticed a spelling error that was missed I kicked him in him exposed groin it should be ...

I love your style. You give very vivid details, the imagery you put into my head is great. I can see, feel, and hear the story, I feel as if ...

Very true. This story exemplifies the human race in a short descriptive fable. I am not a crier, I don't cry st funerals of loved ones, but this brought tears ...

Yes! Amen, I'm tired of people making stereotypes about Christians. Finally someone wrote something like this, I love it. This made me reflect on my faith, and I'm glad you ...

Man, it's hard to comment after other people already have, It's a very good story I love your style. I think it need more details about the environment and the ...

Very good, I love it. To quote azilla I'm not going to do any nit-picky things on this because you really don't need it. Your word-choices are spot-on and your ...

This was a very good story, I was hooked at the beginning. The problem I have with it, is it feels like the sentences are all running together. I suggest ...

Very good work of science fiction. The other comments took my edits. Someone else said that decaying is not the best word, he's right a better word to use would ...

It's very good. At first, I thought it was going to be an annoying teenage drama, but you fixed it. Your stage directions were good, I would suggest adding more ...