BroadwayLuver

Am I allowed to bump?

Thanks! Any ideas where I could inquire on this getting published?

Yeah.. I would have to work on making it more of a poem.. It is kind of like more than a story, but I'll work on it! Thanks for the ...

He walks on the dusty sand Eyes darting beneath his night-vision glasses As a grimy boot steps softly into the doorway A child cries lying in the corner curled up ...

I do like it.. but maybe a bit more elaborating?

To go against the fold, I really enjoyed this. I believe the short length contributed to the story. The only thing I had a problem with was the spelling, but ...

I believe I am going to post my poem about a soldier in Iraq. I really like it, hopefully you guys will too.

I was told about it on a message board. I enjoy writing, I really do.

Thanks everyone for the positive and negative reviews. I will keep them in mind. I felt better to see that SOME people actually liked it. Remember, this is only the ...

Good flow. Spacing is very appropriate, it also helps the flow. I like the repeating.

One of the few poems that I have seen where the rhyming is beneficial to the whole flow of the poem. Good Job.

Very powerful. Your message came through loud and clear. The part about dying as one gave me chills.

She walks alone to class with her books in hand Some boys walk by laughing at her clothes, he hair, her face One looks back, eyes soft apologizing to her ...