BroadwayGirl

Okay Phebe, my review might not be helpful but we'll see. Instead of Quoting a bunch of things I think I'll just tell you what is wrong and then when ...

Alright Alex this was definitely an improvement from your last post. But something that concerns me is that you have not been keeping your 2:1 ratio. Since you have now ...

Grammar, spelling, punctuation, these are all VERY important things in any writing or else it becomes ineligible. So, I shall show you some areas that need improvement. Phebe I need ...

Quote: "Welcome to Eden", said the sign on the road. I think the words Welcome to Eden should be in italics rather than quotation. Quote: Firstly, because the original plan ...

This poem was a tad bit confusing but still good, just a few suggestions for improvement. Quote: "You're old and boring, you don't understand me!" I've been there too; I ...

Hey Phebe I know that this isn't a helpful critic because you already know that I love it as you already showed it to me to at school, so I ...

Hey Phebe it's Emily!!! This critic may seem bad but it is meant to help you(plus you can critic my stuff later if you feel the need to critic something) ...

This was a generally well written song, I myself have written a song or to but still yet need to post them. As I was reading this there were a ...

This poem unfortunately sounds like it came right out of a Hallmark card. When I read this poem it doesn't sound like you took this poem seriously. If you want ...

Quote : DO NOT ENTER I warn you, beware You’re entering the room of a teenage girl Her private domain, her forbidden lair Something in this first part draws you ...

That was a very well writen poem. [quote] She recalls how she used to fly Soaring up through clouds so high. That (for example) could have been more descriptive For ...

That was VERY good. I can certainly relate to that exact same feeling. One thing that I found confusing was the little intro/beggining part. I think either the punctuation was ...

This was generally a good poem First you could start by describing the actions in more detail as at the end i was left kind of confused: did she leave, ...

there are soooooo many words I could use to describe this poem....... complex, intriging and in a way romantic!!! I hate that I can't give you any constructive critisism because, ...

This wasn't the greatest poem but it wasn't awful All I'm asking is for you to make it romantic if you want it to be romantic and correct your punctuation ...