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it's got a good 'beat' to it, and it flows pretty good, although here and there are bits that kind of break it up....but it's good :)

This is the 2005 National Young Writers Festival in Australia...

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I like the second one :) so.... 7/10

Part IV Oh...where am I? I must have fallen asleep, I think, blinking, the light hurting my eyes. Light?!?!?! Are we out of the underground chambers? “Get up miss, I ...

Can someone please crit this???!!! :? :)

We belive in ONE God too. Jesus is God's 'sun', but they are really the same person. It's pretty hard to comprehend

oops, sorry Fontroy :oops: It's funny....go pigs! lol... 7/10

I like the first ones, but not the last one :) so.... 7/10

Yeah, it's cute :) Short and sweet, and a nice swing to it

Yeah, same as what Katie said. post more!!! :)

Nice!!! Nice and short and sweet....you did this well :) I like the second verse.

7/10 I like the first one. The others are not so good

That's great, Snoink!!! Congrats :)

It's a nice and simple poem. It didn'g grab me much either, but it was still nice. A bit plain, maybe, and although you tried to express yourself, it didn't ...