Boni_Bee

The clatter of a body falling down stairs, Then ringing silence fills the air. He hadn’t meant to push her down. Now all he can do is stand and drown ...

^ditto :)

funny!!! fast, quirky, and interesting...

I think this poem was great! It actually made me smile (not at you,), but I like how some of it was ryming, and the rest was more serious. Although ...

Nice poem!!! It has a sweet, lazy tone, with a bit of emotion, but not enough to get excited. Good job

Yeah, I didn't really get this, but it was good. The first stanza didn't ryme as well, and some of the stanza's were a bit off...but quite good.

I moan, and try to stay still, but I can feel my skin burning from the friction. Suddenly, the rope snaps, and I am grasped by the wind, and hurled ...

Thanks, Nefer :D I'll fix those up as soon as I can. I appreciate the critques, because now I know what to work on next time.

sleep...sleep...CRASH!!! I sit up with a start, how long have I been asleep? I realise I'm tied down to the veranda post, and the wind is tugging at me. My ...

Mask

A Sentence of a New Life – Prologue Scene: Ballroom in London, England. In a regal ballroom, on a sultry night, a young woman stood next to a French window, ...

Thanks!!! :D I'm going to write a prologue, so you'll all stop asking why Thomas Witting is acting that way! :)

Thanks, SilverGlitter and Snoink!!! :D That was helpful, and I'll edit the story now...but one thing...I like to put spoken sentences on another line, because you can dicern conversations a ...

Once Jesus died, there was to be no more sacrifices, or Jewish rituals, but because the Jews didn't belive he was the Christ (they wanted an earthly king, not an ...

Thanks Nefer! :)