Boni_Bee

7/10 because it might be what you look like!!! :P (just kidding :wink:)

^writes emotional poems

4/10 because I don't get it... :?

Can you touch type? (and no looking at the keyboard if you can!!! :wink: lol) I can do about 60-65wpm, and its really handy for writing and doing critiques :D ...

The large wooden door creaked as it slowly opened. The white candles from the hall illuminated the small room and the silluethe of a large man in robes appeared. Do ...

Grandma Grandma was a smallish woman with white fluffy hair and chocolate-brown eyes. She always dressed in a skirt and blouse, and a large cardigan with numerous pockets. Charlotte loved ...

“Some mother you were,” she had said faintly. Does the g.irl or the mom say that??? This is interesting, but I'm not sure that its going anywhere. Everything is introduced ...

Descending into darkness. “Mum! Help me! Where are you? ” With arms and legs flailing, she tumbled helplessly into the pits of hell. Fire burned her soul and droplets of ...

Thanks for the comments :) I thought I'd mentioned a friend in about the second chapter...but I'll go see if I can establish one

Thanks Niobe and Amice. I fixed up the gramma errors.... I'll try to make the next chapters better :D

Ummm....I think you need to do a bit of research on this era, so you can understand the story better :wink: lol.... The Cat o' nine tails was most commonly ...

Thanks Niobe....but I don't quite agree with your suggestions.... I know a lot about the transportation and convict era, and the smallest term for anyone was 5 years, and the ...

Thanks Niobe :) I fixed it up.... I really appreciate everyones critiques and comments, as its helping me to continue writing this :D

Striking poem...usually war poems are all very similar, but I think this one is somehow different, although I can't explain how... Anyway, good job, and, as zelithon will be in ...

I don't think this was overly cliche, and I liked how it flowed pretty well...good job