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Re: Please Listen
Hey Litehawk! So I don't really think this sounds like Narrative poetry, because it doesn't really tell much of a story, but never the less I enjoyed it. The only ...
Mon Jan 18, 2010 7:52 am -
Re: Don't cry, love.
Hi Emmy! So first off, I didn't like the italics in here, as Amy said let the words emphasize themselves. I'm guessing this like a message to yourself when you ...
Mon Jan 18, 2010 7:45 am -
Re: Hallo? Anybody there?
Hello Rain! Welcome to YWS! If you need help figuring stuff out PM me okay? :) So tell us a little about yourself! What do you like to write? Do ...
Mon Jan 18, 2010 7:33 am -
Re: Make me....I dare you
Both done! I want to try and get 100 reviews in the next two days so flood me with your works so I can make it!!! Narrative and Dramatic poetry ...
Mon Jan 18, 2010 7:23 am -
Re: The Ruin of Daroder
Hey Ky! This poem actually reminded me a lot of something from Lord of the Rings, which is really cool. You've got a pretty good way of rhyming, but like ...
Mon Jan 18, 2010 7:19 am -
Re: Maybe...
Hey Live, so I agree with Matt, you have a nice beginning and end, but the middle gets kind of long. I really love the beginning of this, most people ...
Mon Jan 18, 2010 6:59 am -
Re: Seed of Life.
Dude Mo! This is awesome! I love the edges and the way the color kind of dies out as you get into the middle so it focuses more on the ...
Mon Jan 18, 2010 6:55 am -
Re: The Wicked Tree of Rid
Yay! I really like this Jon, I think it's great! :) Your rhymes don't feel forced, and you've got the poetic examples that tend to be missing in a lot ...
Mon Jan 18, 2010 6:42 am -
Re: Concepts
Hey Young Gun, photography makes me happy, so having someone ask me to review photography is exciting. Okay, so lets begin, shall we. Rainy Day- This one I think is ...
Mon Jan 18, 2010 6:09 am -
Re: YWS Has Gone Leet!
Teehee. *Reviews*
Mon Jan 18, 2010 3:59 am -
Re: Perfect
Okay, well I'm not going to say I loved it, but it's not all that bad. I'm not so fond on the subject of "Oh he/she peers deep into my ...
Sun Jan 17, 2010 10:33 am -
Re: Senseless Love
Hey Ben, quick tip. While I was reading this, I noticed you used the word "Sense" or various forms of the word. That kind of threw me off the poem, ...
Sun Jan 17, 2010 9:51 am -
Re: Specials - Chapter 1
Okay so the biggest problem I had with this story was the way she talked about herself. Her "sparkling blue eyes" and "Petite lips" etc, and since you're telling it ...
Sun Jan 17, 2010 9:37 am -
Re: Compare
Rawr! Evil house!! I'm going to do this if it kills me! Okay so Right Angel- Her leg's a bit too think, seeing as her arms are so thin. Also ...
Sun Jan 17, 2010 7:30 am -
Re: Fight for Life
Hey Shelby! First, I don't think it really needs to be rated 16+ because it wasn't all that gorey, but that's just my opinion. So anyway, what I think you ...
Sun Jan 17, 2010 4:40 am
