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Re: The Three Crowns - Chapter 1
Hi there King! I'm Hope and I'll be reviewing today :D. Why run from that which we know will catch us? Hid e and you shall find the safety in ...
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Re: Neon at Heart-Chapter One
Okay I just had this whole review typed up, and then lost it, so I'm a little miffed right now. *Sigh* anyway, lets get on with it. Neon purple band ...
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Re: My Mama
Hi there Trix! I really liked this story, you've got a very strong narrative and I really get the feeling of your MC. I was reminded of To Kill a ...
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Re: Soul Eater
Well there's not much to go on, seeing as it's so short, but it seems interesting enough. I can't really tell how good it will be, or if it will ...
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Re: Darkest World [0.04]
Well first off, I hope this isn't based off of you, or someone you know, self harming is dangerous, and can do serious damage to you. I clean my hand ...
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Re: A Conversation
Wow Jane, this is great I must say. I'm a Pennsylvania girl, and for a long time my mom's talked about moving to North Carolina. I can related to the ...
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Re: An Extraordinary Encounter
Hi there Smashles! So most of this story is sort of obviously very teenage girl romance-y, which is okay, but in some parts you used things that were so cliche ...
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Re: Slipped
Hey there! Welcome to YWS! I'm Bondgirl, or Hope as many call me, and I'm here to review! :D I was blinded by her beauty, not being able to see ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: My Journalistic Adventure
Hey Baby! I'm Hope and I'll be reviewing your story today! It was my first assignment on the job of journalism. This sentence is rather awkward, and as the first ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: R.I.P. Pretty green leaf
Haha, this makes me laugh, without the little bit in the beginning I would never have know this was writing about a leaf! It sound like you're writing about a ...
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Re: Love the Scenario
I have to agree with Elinor, this left me quite confused, and I'm not quite sure what to make of it. I can't quite get what the meaning of it ...
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Re: Kill Me Slowly
Hey Eva! The repetition of "Kill me slowly" you overused. There's a fine line of repetition and overuse, and you have to be careful about it because if you do ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: Sydney~The Follow up
Hey Kat! Well I haven't read the first part yet, so I'll just review this as something on it's own. Well first off, I think you should slow down a ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: Medusa
Yes! Ellie Yes! This is so much better then before! You did a great job editing it, and instead of sounding like a cheesy teen romance it's great now! I ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: Make me....I dare you
Done! And Ellie, I reviewed your poem before I even realized you had asked me to xD
May 1, 2010
