Young Writers Society

I'm going to lock this and re post it once I'm finished maybe.

Jas! Can you review this for me? =D

I want an extremely honest opinion, don't hold back. =]

It’s late, but sleep refuses to come. I had a nightmare last night, about the world bombing itself until it was nothing but black. Walking alone, the city was reduced ...

I'll grab a spot!

So a quick tip on this one, read over it again, you use a lot of words quite often, and very close together. Like this Nathaniel sets the book down, ...

So! Since this chapter is mostly action, and very very little dialogue, you really have to make sure the action is entertaining. Currently the action you have is kind of ...

Okay, so three quick things on this one- Formatting! Dooo ett! Jack's dialog- I feel like it's kind of like in one of those movies where it's too lazy to ...

I agree with Rosey and Firestarter. xD That'd be awesome. Mmm... *thinks* TalaPaulwic and Bolt. ... Oh god, that'd be a riot... xDDD Oh. My. God. YES.

Holy crap Ish, you're freaking gorgeous O_O KAH too!! And Loxxy is indeed quite foxxy especially with that 'fro xD Also Jem I love your eyes

Alright, done, done, done, and working on Vast's three. Keep 'em coming people!!

Hey Mary! Thanks for giving me the link to your story, I don't review as often anymore and I love getting requests because I know exactly what I have to ...

Hey Mixed, so I reviewed the first part so I figured I might as well review the second. Anyway so I'm a little disappointed with this since you had a ...

Hey Night! Welcome to YWS! =D Can I give you a nickname? For some reason I realy want to call you lightbulb :P. Anyway welcome! Hope to see you around!

110/10 KIRBYY!!!