Blueskysummer

First off, amazing story! You manage to fit so much depth into the characters in just the first chapter, I feel as if I already know Katie. Your storytelling has ...

This is a really great story, first off. Though I haven't read part one, I still was able to follow around. however, it could use a bit of fine-tuning. The ...

I loved the simplicity of this poem. The simple references to the couple as 'him' and 'her' gave it character and aided in the simplicity. I was unsure of the ...

This was delightfully creepy. I loved that you gave his motives, as well as lingered on his morals of being an honest barber. It not only gave him depth, but ...

This is amazing. Granted, it is slightly adult for my taste, but that's not really a bad thing. There are a few punctuation problems, but those can be fixed with ...

I do have to say that this has potential. The intro paragraph really pulled me in immediately. But, it also has a lot of tuning up to do... Firstly, I ...

I'm glad to see this continue so soon! Though I do have to say I liked the first chapter better, this is still very good. A few technical details need ...

First off, I'd like to say that I'm really intrigued by this story. I want to know what happens next, and what significance the girl has in the plot. Though ...