BloodStainedWhite

Hey! Simply awesome. It's good to see someone writing for the lord. It gives you a bit more hope when you see others out there. Sorry I don't have anything ...

I know this is meant to be a lyric so it is hard to judge this on solely the text. Personally this is a little angry for my liking and ...

It's quiet here. I don't like the silence. Where there's no sound there's no life. I'm tired... Of singing to myself, Finding comfort in my own words And endlessly drying ...

The reason why the first stanza is rejected is because I know what I do is wrong and so it's easy to reject it. My focus on the poem was ...

Hey, I liked it. Even though one person commented on how your first stanza sounded like the speaker was a robot, I thought it commented on how you were feeling. ...

Uh dude just so you know: you can't have the sun on your back and a shadow trailing behind you. It's just can't happen. Sorry to start of pointing that ...

It's not wrong You just can't see it The way I see it If you opened you eyes You would agree You would agree with me. You'd see that I ...

Really nice. I seriously enjoyed the feel of the poem. Your use of metaphor in both the grand narrative and individual lines was well thought out and in general it ...

I think the best thing you could do is read over your work once you've written it, because the spelling mistakes distract the reader and make the poem far less ...

Cool, I dig. The second stanza lacked continuity with the rest of the piece, but it had a wonderful dark feel.

Howzit going I was looking for a site where I could do some writing and maybe check out some others so if anyone is keen to read my stuff I'd ...