Blink

Here I am, as requested :) A cry of surprised pain was almost drowned out by the crack of gunshot. A few things: The use of 'a cry of surprised ...

makes you think... WHY do authors get published and yet better ones get passed over? Paolini got his self-published. His parents, in actual fact. A publisher then took him after ...

Two now :) I vote Heather.

Sure :)

This thread looks lonely and I need to procrastinate, so some very nitty picks first: blood stained 'bloodstained', one word :wink: He couldn’t think and he couldn’t see and his ...

OK! Come on people, all these lovely pieces of work are looking at me for a review and I don't know which to go for!

Thanks, I'm writing up the battle scene (was going in anyway) and hopefully the edited version should be up soon :)

You are both completely right. Kylan - I've been thinking about those irritating metaphors for a while. I feel like chopping them off and finally, I shall :) It shall ...

Oh this takes me back... You see, I always wanted (and still do) to be a writer but I also loved Lord of the Rings... See where this is going? ...

Boredom? *shifty eyes* Sure no problem, just say the word :)

Hello! I stood outside the rotten , iron gate looking into the old abandon manor. Several things wrong with this sentence I am sorry to say. Firstly, there is the ...

Hey, welcome Bishop! I'm Mark, or Blink, by the way. What type of stuff do like to write (genres and so). I like fantasy myself, and see you are already ...

Ye I agree. Words like elevator. Elevator is a word in British-English, we just tend to use 'lift'. I voted dialect (I think :? ) but I can't see what ...

My advice--space out the paragraphs and put it in separate threads. You can't expoect people to keep coming back and reviewing. Oh, and I just thought I would point out: ...

Hi! Well, I'll go through the nitpicks first: Monday at the office was a Monday like any other. It sounds friendly and easy flowing but this is a very clichéd ...