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Re: Shattered Snowflakes
Did you mean to say, opening and closing? Oops. Thanks for pointing out the typo! If you are going to say that Often in the mornings, Devin felt you should ...
May 6, 2009 -
Re: Shattered Snowflakes
He laid a hand on the paper, stilling it and keeping his other hand steady on the ink. Moving the paper under his forearm, he reached out and lathered the ...
May 6, 2009 -
Re: bounty hunter, chapter 2
mistery killers It's spelled "mystery." I listened even harder, it didn't sound like an earthquake either Comma splice. I could hear voices shouting from outside "Voices" themselves can't "shout." I ...
Apr 23, 2009 -
Re: Short story fantasy beginning
First off: You haven't figured a title out yet? They're pretty difficult, but they'd certainly improve first impressions, as it's the link you click on to get to the story, ...
Apr 23, 2009 -
Re: All But the Humans
As aforementioned, prologue is spelled "prologue," not prolague; though that may have just been a typo. Lavender was asleep on the ground, her head resting on Lunar's back. The werewolf ...
Apr 23, 2009
