BlackMirror

I think clograbby just summed it up so if you follow what she says i don't think you'll have a problem with the rest of your story. Oh, and welcome.

o.k. I have to be brutally honest. I couldn't stand your piece. It felt like a soap opera or page from a diary. It wasn't the writing, you're a great ...

Very strange, but I'm curious as to where you will go with the rest of the story.

Nice work. A bit strange, well a lot strange, but still interesting, especially the names of the characters. It seems like you know what you're doing, but remember to pay ...

This is just a quick post but i really liked your story and i don't usually like fantasy stories but remember to keep the opening of your story simple and ...

Gag me with a spoon! I enjoyed your the p.o.v you used but to be brutally honest I couldn't stand your story. Your intro was pretty good, but after reading ...

Hey, how's it going. I just wanted to say hello to everybody.