Billy

My God. Everything about that was terrible! The plot, the explanations, everything! Just from that, anyone can see that you are truly the king of typos. I agree with Elly, ...

Thanks for the critiques, I tried to cut down on the adverbs and wordiness. Sorry about the thoughts not being in italics, I forgot that it doesn't go from Word ...

A full stop is a period.

When I said more spacing I meant that you could break the third paragraph up into a couple of paragraphs, other than that the spacings good.

I believe that in Family Guy, Peter's references to Meg as 'It' would be a joke implying that Meg's gender is uncertain.

I think she means angel.