Bexy2556

Hi there, Thank you so much for your reply :) there was a lot to read through it I *think* I've got everything! I totally agree with most of what ...

Hi there! Thank you very much for your feedback :) I'm so busy trying to get everything down on the page from inside my head that I seem to be ...

Hi there! Your story has the potential to be quite interesting however I do think that the first chapter is a little confusing. The writing style is good but I ...

Hi BlueAfrica, Thanks so much for your reply. I'm glad you enjoyed the story so far and thanks so much for your advice! Definitely taken on board and will be ...

Hi there! I enjoyed the opening to this, it jumps straight into the story which I like. I think it sounds great in first person, so no need to change ...