BenFranks

Hullo Sam. Here's my review I promised you old boy. Nitpicks: Ezekiel made his move. The ivory piece floated through the air for a few moments, kept upright by his ...

Okay, here's my review. Since being constructive may help your future writing to appear a bit less perogative. Edits, comments, points, etc are in red . Top 10 reasons why ...

Hey there. I think the best points about this piece would be the rhyhtm and pace you've created, which makes it feel very beaty and natural. However, this completely conflicts ...

I like this poem and the way you control your readers. It's pretty original and I like the pace. However, I do have a couple of nitpicks: Completely blinded us, ...

This is a very valid point, but you need to make sure you're not generalising. A lot of young adult fiction is still fairly clean. It's when you begin to ...

Evenin' Lilymoore, Firstly, this poem is naturally admirable and full of lovely jubly compliments so it is only all to obvious that we're all going to love it and love ...

Evening PaperCrane, Firstly, I'd like to say I like the ideas you've got here. The characters and personalities you've briefly crafted indicate that they could have a lot of depth. ...

Hey there Silent! I really enjoyed this piece, especially the way you combined different sentence structuring. The only thing I would like to see is an even bigger push on ...

Hey Elinor! Here as requested (: I've got to say, the way you do this is brilliant. I found myself being emotionally touched by the idea of having someone like ...

Hey there! The first thing I noticed and liked about the poem, whether it be intentional or not, is the way you've structured it. By spacing each line away from ...

Hey there! I've got to say, this is not just amusing and sarcastic, it is a brilliant poem in itself too. Apart from odd structural points where lines feel too ...

Hey Elinor, here as requested. (: My comments/suggestions/improvements are in green for you. Thomas Pike placed a single red rose on top of the mounds of others which that surrounded ...

hey there! In terms of structure, this is one of the best poems I've seen on YWS in a long time. I loved the exploration of emotions and the choice ...

Hey there! Up until the line "Stab me..." your fluency is very well devised through well chosen punctuation and word choice, however from the line "Stab me..." youe fluency is ...

Hey there, This is a very thought provoking poem and naturally one each and every person on YWS can relate to. We all have that heavy conscience of whether or ...