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Thank God you've put down the date and time you've written this... haha

“Dear Clara All these strange half-lit lives…” –Patrick Lewis, in a moment of insane clarity. Glass on Glass These frayed ends that make up a year the phoenix that was ...

Open The walkways are tangled in entrails the roads scoured by the flood as all men drive bleeding in their comfortable cars their radios pissing out blood Human Beings are ...

Haha the reason their is so many spelling errors- or it seems like there is- is because I'm Australian lol The lack (complete lack, you'll notice) of punctuation in the ...

(This is not in its proper layout... but to save time....) (Soon to be a) Postcard I remember poetic mornings Siamese anaesthetized afternoons; a cool red hat, suits, wide newspapers- ...

Hey sarah, I thought this was really pretty good. It's very stream of consciousness because of the imagery which is great. One thing I'd change though is the stanza: "Memories ...

Hahaha don't even worry about it man... for the record I obviously wasn't drunk when I wrote this. If you haven't already, you should read some Ondaatje.

Ok........... no it is not the last too lines you need help with... its the whole thing. Listen, "saying" something about how "hurt" you are or whatever... writing the word ...

Ok........... no it is not the last too lines you need help with... its the whole thing. Listen, "saying" something about how "hurt" you are or whatever... writing the word ...

I need some feedback for a school assignment urgently- if you could assist me, my poem's called Stains and its in lyrical poetry. I'll return the favour. Cheers guys.

You ever been drunk Krupp?

Did you ever consider what I just said? "Honey"... please tell me you're not 13 like you're profile says.

Hahah oh my god... hey I'm sorry I said damn... you're sposed to be a novelist right? You ever read The Catcher In The Rye? And talk about myself? Why ...

Need some reviews- its for an extension english project at school. Cheers.

"leave you all alone"- cut to "leave you alone"... it sticks with your original rhythm... I haven't counted syllables but either way it feels better. And "love contained is threw" ...