BellaRoma

Note to all. This may not make sense unless you have read 'Mercy'. Check it out on related works. Hope that helps a bit.

She talks to Mercy in her head. The feel I get is a split personality. Mercy sort of spawned off what was already there. She's an enigma, yes it's kind ...

Dialogue is probably my weakness. In English we're encouraged to lay off it so we've not been properly shown how to punctuate it. This is also a dialogue heavy chapter. ...

I knew where I wanted Layla to end up, my villain is centred around the asylum. Something big had to happen or there would be no reason to have her ...

Also bear in mind that later on I might re-order the chapters. I haven't got it completely organised yet. At least I didn't totally screw it up. Watch this space!

Minor question. Did you read the first part. It was called 'Mercy' and was probably better than this one. I know it's far from perfect and I'm going to edit ...

Sorry if it seems a bit drastic. You can probably expect an edit later on but this is my best draft so far. Enjoy :-)

Thanks so much

Hope you enjoy :-) Feedback anyone?

Thanks for reviewing, I do need some pointers. As to the backstory thing, I said that it was somewhere near the beginning. I myself am not straight yet. You know ...

A really interesting and moving piece. The short sentences grabbed me and didn't seem overused despite the amount of them. The topic was dealt with tastefully and there was just ...

I loved the suspense and the way the scrbblings were so chaotic but made a lot of sense at the same time. Any more to come?