BechtelAuthor

I'll be sure to message you the amazon link.

Sorry toots. I'm not posting on here anymore because I PUBLISH NEXT WEEK! All 28 chapters in fine print. HAHAHA.

Dude, the second chapter is already up. You can proofread that one too if you like. Also I just don't have enough time to crank out reviews fast enough to ...

Oh I'm halfway finished with this novel, I just don't have the time to give a million and one reviews to post all 15 chapters I've finished. I'll make the ...

That's because they're not close yet. I'm happy I conveyed that properly. I'm trying to show most of the time, I'm experimenting with telling. Show don't Tell is a guideline ...

Of course he was struggling. That doesn't make him a slave to his carnal whims. The fact remains he DIDN'T look. He wanted to, he is a teenaged boy after ...

As always great job reviewing, as always. And I'm glad you liked it. A few things though. 'typical guy, struggling to turn his gaze away from something young and pretty.' ...

You really know how to brown nose... I like you. In all seriousness thanks for your positive feedback. Poetry? I've never tried my hands at poetry before. I don't even ...

It is the unailienable right of the author to invent new words. Urnyard is one such word. It is a counterpart to graveyard, which is a proper composite word (I ...

It's odd that FictionPress's spelling check didn't catch those, good catch on the repeat in that paragraph too. "A town this large is hard to miss? You'd figure It would ...

Also I explained the nature of Wren. His temple was filled with Sun symbols and Fire.

Almost everything you mentioned is covered in chapter two which I will be posting in about half an hour. THe nature of Veya Wren and Ontan are revealed slowly throughout ...

YOu only discuss the downfalls of religion. You should devote an entire verse to all aspects of society, government, social/racial/gender ideologies, family life etc. Don't go a tenth of the ...