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Re: The Wanderings Part 1 (so far)
This is general and quick, but Firestarter hit most of it: I, personally, would refrain from starting with the date, place, or time. I think it slows everything down, and ...
Mar 7, 2005 -
Re: Ignore this one: read Gone Away Home(i changed it)
By no means bad, but could use a lot of work. Character deveolopment is almost nonexistent. In fact, I don't really care about Sarah, because I don't really know her. ...
Feb 27, 2005 -
Re: the unnamed story part 1(where in our hero meets death)
I agree, attempt to write more when you post your story. It seems a little too fast-paced and random. Try to get the atmosphere going a little more; set it ...
Feb 27, 2005