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  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: Screaming

    Hot shit, man. The ending is perfect. It's short and brutal, memories manifest themselves so there's no need for exposition, it's the perfect little package. Needs some editing though, nothing ...

    Jun 19, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Run, Little One

    Better than I can do with poetry. I like the line about the sad new moon, it seems to me that the author is identifying with the solitariness of the ...

    Apr 11, 2010

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Bittersweet

    It's a nice little snapshot. The activating incident comes on a little too late for the abrupt ending, though. It seems to be about 3/5 setting it up, and then ...

    Feb 26, 2010

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: Music (Part One)

    This was well written and I can't wait to read the rest of it. There's always room for awesome fantasy ideas to tie into music, it's such a subconscious thing, ...

    Dec 25, 2009

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Jacob's Ladder

    Hey, awesome, I'm glad I found this. That's a tough choice to make, climbing that ladder, even if words have led you no where. Just make sure that the ladder ...

    Dec 22, 2009

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Aja, Aja

    Yeah, I identified very much with this. I've actually been there, at the point where there is no question when you've lost someone. One moment they are your friend and ...

    Dec 10, 2009

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Matter Matters

    Ah, what a great poem. I'm such a literal person that poetry does little else for me but leave impressions, so I'm not going to review this the "right" way, ...

    Dec 7, 2009

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Words of a Conceited Man

    This was just terrible. I was expecting to read the words of a conceited man, and instead come to fine that I've been had by an introspective satirist. Not funny. ...

    Sep 17, 2009

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Prayer Flags at Nam-Tso Lake

    Wow this was quite excellent. There are always other strings Who offer up their red and white and blue and yellow and green Mantras to the wind In that order ...

    Sep 17, 2009

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Eden

    Hey this works pretty well for a short piece. It probably wouldn't have worked with a different POV, so good choice there. Some damn fine descriptions in this: His heart ...

    Sep 17, 2009

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Love so pretty yesterday.

    The butterflies died and lay in the snow. Yay. But I felt like something new. That feeling of abandon that I love to give to you. I know I'm lousy ...

    Sep 17, 2009

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Devil May Care? I Don't.

    The mirror reflects more mirrors. You put them together wrong and show enough people and they will say "Hey, yeah, I can swing that." I don't get the relationship of ...

    Sep 17, 2009

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: --August 15

    It'll do. I think everyone else caught the spelling mistakes and so forth. The teenage years are full of confusion and brooding. I wrote many such like this. Who cares ...

    Sep 17, 2009

  • Article / Essay » Review, General
    Re: Good Dark Fiction

    Johnny Got His Gun by Dalton Trumbo. It's an oldy but a goody, dark political story about a Soldier that gets all of his extremities blown off and is stuck ...

    Sep 17, 2009

  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General
    Re: The White Room (Warning: Graphic Imagery)

    I was delighted as poop to find this. This is just a naturally great horror story. I enjoyed it so much I forgot to think of things to say during ...

    Sep 16, 2009

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