Baroness

Alright! Here I am. First, it's a really great concept. I'm assuming that it's supposed to be a short story? Kudos to you, because I don't have it in me ...

This rather seems like a summary of the story. There is a lot of information in here and not really much else. I think you could definitely do better. If ...

Well. I read this and I think I'm going to read it again. It's a snowball effect, isn't it? It just rolls and rolls and rolls and collects imagery and ...

I liked your other piece so much that I simply had to read what else you have in here. This piece is beautifully written--it's just beautiful. Especially the beginning, especially ...

Ahhh, what a sweet story! I very much enjoyed reading this, though at first I was a little skeptical. I remembered an assignment we once had in class, to write ...

Alright, I was intrigued by the synopsis of the story. I've never read about a support group before and hearing from different girls in their different points is very intriguing ...

I did indeed know it was a dream! I like the part where she wakes up, not because the intensity is too much or too dreadful, but because it is ...

I like the atmosphere you've created. I can feel the summer day and it was brought about by a touch of nostalgia--that's a good talent you've got right there. You're ...