BarcodedKami

If it's short then post it under short stories and you can put the rest in multiple parts of course.

Hello there! I suppose I'll be the first to review your rather interesting guide to Zombeism. I'll type my corrections in green so that you can see them! You're basic ...

Miss Mary-Edwin Treslavander stood nervously, clutching a placid red balloon, during that particularly humid day on the twelfth platform in the Laureldale City train station. The train station was exa

She led her to a home I believe that should be "was led" in past tense. I bet your little sister is a little angel. :)

Your points on bullying are all very good. There is just one thing that slightly irked me whilst reading you wrote: No matter what the appearance of the bully, he ...

It was good but slow to getting to the whole point of it all. Don't get me wrong. I loved the descriptions.

This is a very interesting piece. It took me a while to really get hooked into it. I was confused about who was speaking and of what gender the speaker ...

This is a very interesting piece. It took me a while to really get hooked into it. I was confused about who was speaking and of what gender the speaker ...

Your story made me smile. It truly did. I loved how you showed the narrator's inner strife in its own comical way. The style is unique in it's own way. ...