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Thanks for the advice!

Rayen ambled down a cobble stoned corner. The rain poured down from the gray sky, and soaked her. She had an umbrella with her, but it was protecting four small ...

Rayen ambled down a cobble stoned corner. The rain poured down from the gray sky, and soaked her. She had an umbrella with her, but it was protecting four small ...

But it’s his wife’s condition that makes him refuse the foods that his swallowed in two bites . This sentence is confusing, I don't know what you mean. You are ...

Wow. That was very interesting, in a great way. It all flowed together so nicely.

This is so funny its sad and so sad its funny. Perfect characters aren't meant to be.

Rain’s eyes stung, her running legs were a throbbing red, her black hair smoked, all because of the Burning. Sprinting on a bed of smoldering stones, Rain had no time ...

Is it The JCTG or JCTG? Because in part one you use JCTG and part two you used The JCTG.

One thing you spelled litter-box wrong, otherwise its good.

I screamed the last time as I felt the paint take over my body for good and it all went black. For good? I would change it to completely taken ...

Who'd have guessed that our problems would be solved by such a small accident as this? They're problems are solved by losing each other? That's :cry: so sad :cry:

You use victory two times. that's fine but would sound better with two different words.