Bananasaurus

7/10

You enjamb really well, but sometimes you comma splice and use sentence fragments. I totally want to believe your rhyme scheme, but these make it hard.

I do not fear the taste of flame Interesting, but you don't take this idea deeper, so it falls flat. Fire consumes both flesh and bone Does it? I'm not ...

A street cuts into our skin and between our lives. Our memories hold steady the concrete wall of cars separating this city from itself. They can’t see us except for ...

No typos, incase anyone's wondering.

I stands there under my weeping shower head feeling empathy while its thousand tears from its thousand ducts slave once a day (or twice when I got hockey) to wash ...