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Re: poetry
This poem creates great imagery! And i like the formation of the stanzas, it fits rather well with the way the poem was writen. And in any sense it is ...
Jul 22, 2010 -
Re: Love
messed up on the 4th line, the two points should be switched.
Jan 13, 2010 -
Re: Love
It's beautiful; it's ugly You show it; you burry it inside you Feeling over joyed; crushing your heart Burning in your soul; you're sitting on a cloud It's lifting you ...
Jan 13, 2010 -
Re: When You Fall
this poem is really nice, i liked it:) and the rhythm wasn't entirely bad. I can relate to this, and i enjoy that. the end was my favorite part though ...
Aug 26, 2009 -
Re: Traitor
I cried over you, I fought hard for us, You never cared! And its me you don’t trust? YOU acted the way you did, You lied, you insulted, you treated ...
Aug 26, 2009 -
Re: True Love?
Butterflies when you’re here Heart ache when you’re gone. But I am truly happy That no longer I am alone. Whether I’m in your arms Or you’re smiling at me. ...
Jun 16, 2009 -
Re: Elly
This was very nice, but you need to use spell check. Also, the format switched during the middle of the poem. For the first few stanzas, it was rhyming at ...
Jun 11, 2009 -
Re: The adventures of the geek.
That was good, and it was quite funny at the end. You should write more funny poetry. I -as well as many others I'm sure- would enjoy that alot. Keep ...
Jun 9, 2009 -
Re: My Old Friend
This poem is really good, i thought the stanzas were really well thought out. But i do have one TINY problem with this. The last two stanzas first sentences match ...
Jun 9, 2009 -
Re: What a beautiful girl
I was actually just thinking about the "yet only few succeed" line before i logged on and well, it's kinda stupid and out of place. I'm going to rewrite this ...
Jun 9, 2009 -
Re: About me!
ahaha :P love you Brie. But yes indeed, it is very fortunate that there is people like you out there :D
Jun 9, 2009 -
Re: With You
This was really good, I just noticed one mistake. When you said "Your lips, your kiss make me glad I'm still here." It should be "Your lips, your kiss makes ...
Jun 9, 2009 -
Re: What a beautiful girl
Perfect hair, perfect skin Beautiful girl. Perfect body, perfect face Beautiful girl. Low cut shirts, tight shorts Beautiful girl. Brand name clothes, expensive shoes Beautiful girl. Money, friends Be
Jun 9, 2009 -
Re: Just a dream
We are standing across the room you catch my eye. You are looking at me as I do the same to you. You come towards me with a smile on ...
Jun 8, 2009 -
Re: My First Post
WOW this is really good. Im really curious to find out what happens next. You should put a little more detail in to your characters though. I'm really anxious to ...
Mar 13, 2009
