Azila

Wow. I... uh... hold on, I need a moment. *gets up and makes a cup of tea* *sits back down* This chapter was intense, eh? Really well done, though. It's ...

Uh, sorry to break up the mother-daughter-sister discussion going on here... I feel like I just stepped into someone's kitchen. >.> This chapter actually wasn't my favorite. Of course, it's ...

I'm baaaaack. Again. :] Is the beginning of this chapter, by any chance, one of the sections that used to be in third person? Because it feels like it sort ...

*sigh* This novel is so hard to critique, Clockie. Couldn't you, like, write something full of flaws and inconsistencies and weird wordings for once? It would make things so much ...

Dangit. I was actually online when you posted this, and I thought I'd be first to review--but by the time I finished the review I was doing at the time, ...

Ha! I'm back. *feels like Click and Clack and hopes you know who Click and Clack are* I would go on about how much I'm enjoying this novel, but seeing ...

I'm back for more. ^_^ I'm not going to do nit-picks of this chapter, because there's nothing that popped out to me and I don't really have the time just ...

So, I'm back for number two. :} Again, I think I'll start off with some nit-picks, though there won't be many since this is mostly dialogue, and telling people to ...

Hi there Clockie! I know this is kind of old, but I wanted to read/review each chapter, so I'm starting with the beginning. :] This is fairly well-polished, so I'm ...

Hullo! I see you're new to the YWS, so here's a big welcome aboard. If you ever need anything, please let me know. :] First off, let me just say ...

Hi there Kagi! Here to Bamboozle you, as requested. First off, can I just give a little rant about non-story-related-text? Yes? Okay. I strongly dislike all that "I wrote this ...

Okay, take-two. (WARNING: this review is being typed by an angry turtle on a train who doesn't like having her reviews deleted and doesn't like writing on trains.) I really ...

Hi there! First off, I'd like to say that I really enjoyed this piece. You did an excellent job of molding the two stories together. At first, it was a ...

Goodday, mister Ribbit. (Since he's the one who asked for the review, I figure I should address this to him.) As per request, I'm not going to do any nit-picky ...

Hi there, Bear! I'm not going to do any nit-picks of this, because I generally don't nit-pick dialogue (I don't want to interfere in the character's voice) and the way ...