Azila

Oh, and how are you supposed to pronounce Deuce? That's been bugging me for a while. Anybody else gonna review this?? ~Azila~

Very funny. Anyway... This piece is really good. Anybody else want to critique it???

Wow. This is really powerful. I'm not sure I understand the deal with his eyes, so you might want to elaborate a bit more on that --assuming, of course that ...

Okay... thanks guys for reviewing, but can nobody else read this piece? PLEASE? It's terrible XD. So yeah, PLEASE don't read... I'm serious.

Nobody wants to try this? Come on people!

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A term of literary criticism, purple prose is used to describe passages, or sometimes entire literary works, written in prose so overly extravagant, ornate or flowery as to break the ...

I like monkeys a lot, but as Dreamer said, I think a dragon's more fitting for a fiction site. Wait. But then will we have "Dragoned Out" mode rather than ...

Thanks Ayra! What's so funny about wounded bats? *doesn't get it* Oh, and what's "purple prose"?? Thanks for the review, though :D ~Azila~

Oh my goodness! I can so relate! I'm a ballet dancer myself. I have a few suggestions --the only main one being that you space out your paragraphs more, like ...

Very promising! Truly, I definitely think you should continue with this if you can. I have a few minor, nit-picky suggestions. There’s a place, known [s]most commonly[/s] to many of ...

Wow. You are so talented. The descriptions and characters are incredibly vivid. I love the way you showed her personality change, too. The only major problem that humble me noticed ...

Hi! Yes, we are all pretty friendly (as we're demonstrating, no?) and we won't bite if you ask for crits or have questions or anything. Kenya sounds really cool! I ...

This is too short to critique fully, so that might be why you haven't gotten any comments yet. Overall it's pretty good. You have an odd formatting (with one sentence ...

Hi! Ayra pretty much covered it. Read FAQs too... those are really helpful. But what attracted me to your forum is your name!! Are you a dancer? What kind of ...