Azila

Hi! Welcome to the YWS! I'm glad you aren't using boats anymore, but submarines are SO overrated. You should just swim. Anyway, welcome and please PM me if you have ...

Haha! I like that response. This seems kind of like a joke or something, not a real piece of fiction--even flash fiction. You need to elaborate more... it just seemd ...

Ooh, cool pics. You guys are pretty! ...when you're not all twisted up, that is. :D ~Azila~

This was pretty good! I found it a little rambly, making me want to skim and a little telly rather than showy... but you just want grammar corrections, so that's ...

Hi everyone! Mpnjada: How do you pronounce your name?? Just remember to read FAQs and Rules and all, and if you're confused (which can happen easily, I've found) I think ...

There's just a certain something about the Midnight sky and the shadowed forest that, kind of, calls me, you know? It's hard to explain. I guess I'm a Night person ...

Welcome! This is a great site and everyone is very friendly... at least I think so. :P Well we don't usually bite unless we're hungry anyway. :lol: So... if you ...

Much better. :wink: Now get to work on the next chapter! Do you want to KILL us with suspense? :D ~Azila~

This definitely isn't poetry. I think it would fit in Other Fiction, though. I'll go get someone to move it, I'm sure it will be much happier there... ~Azila~

Wow. I'm not an expert on poetry, but even I can tell that this is a true gem. I wish I could see your sketch, but even without seeing it ...

Wow. This is truly a masterpiece. A heartfelt monologue ringing with truth, and sorrow, and hope. I really congratulate you for being able to put your painful past into words--and ...

I didn't read it. :oops: You really should break this up. Especially when you post something longer, if it's just a block of text then not even these lovely people ...

Why did you delete it? I want to read it. :( ~Azila~

This is pretty good! As others have said, it's easy to read and flows very nicely. I think there could be a tad more description--of the boy, the bus, maybe ...

Very good, Cat! It looked long when I scrolled through it before reading it, but when I actually read it it seemed way too short! I wanted MORE!! I think ...